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Mar 30

Echo

Category: Tanka and Haiku

I hear your laughtermockingbird.jpg

in the mockingbird’s sweet song

as you drive away

Pamela Olson, 3/30/08

 

 

This haiku is the response to the

prompt of “laughter”

at One Single Impression.

20 Comments so far

  1. gautami tripathy March 30th, 2008 9:17 am

    Very musical…

    laughter lines

  2. raven March 30th, 2008 9:33 am

    Oh the bittersweetness… beautifully done…

  3. SandyCarlson March 30th, 2008 9:55 am

    Perhaps not a happy parting? This one strikes a chord with me. This is a wonderfully evocative piece. God bless.

  4. Vixen March 30th, 2008 10:08 am

    That describes exactly how I feel every time my precious grandbabies leave after a visit.

    Lovely.

  5. mandy March 30th, 2008 10:42 am

    very good - I like this, it evokes much.

  6. spacedlaw March 30th, 2008 11:31 am

    Bit nostalgic but lovely.

  7. Tumblewords March 30th, 2008 12:18 pm

    Love the sound of laughter in the mockingbird’s song.

  8. Lisa at Greenbow March 30th, 2008 2:45 pm

    This is like a sweet song. Very good.

  9. Noah March 30th, 2008 7:22 pm

    Awesome. I love the picture, too.

    I am or was allergic to birds.

  10. Joyce T. March 30th, 2008 7:39 pm

    Beautiful. It is so amazing what the mockingbird will mimic. I can totally believe this.

  11. Sandy March 31st, 2008 11:26 am

    I think that a mockingbird proabably does really laugh at us. They certainly have a lot to say, don’t they?

  12. lissa March 31st, 2008 2:30 pm

    very sweet, like an ode to love

  13. MyBellavia March 31st, 2008 4:49 pm

    This is so nice! It got me thinking of the day my daughter left for college! tra la la!

  14. gerald galindez March 31st, 2008 10:58 pm

    very sad….

  15. patois April 1st, 2008 4:32 pm

    I am struck by sadness as Gerald is. But the poem is beauty.

  16. Andrée & Michael April 1st, 2008 6:03 pm

    Laughter is happy, but departures are so sad. So few words for such disparate emotions. I enjoy the reference to the birds because I associate birds with so many of my own emotions (my wild joy when the redwing blackbirds return, like today!).

  17. cloudscome April 2nd, 2008 8:25 am

    What a rush of feeling this simple description brings me! Great image and I love the photo too.

  18. qualcosa di bello April 2nd, 2008 11:56 am

    very beautiful…bittersweet. birdsong can be a mocking thing when one is sad, but you find the laughter in the memory

  19. One More Believer April 2nd, 2008 1:00 pm

    amazing to me what one hears in such moments… and that it would be a bird it is simply beautiful…

  20. Alan Summers April 7th, 2008 6:48 am

    Resonates long after the poem is read! ;-)

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