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Apr 19

Whisper of Want

Category: My Poetry

The place I want to get back to

echo and shadow

whispered in winter

 

the steps in the snow

lead around and around

a place called want

 

dust of snow

in a disused graveyard

again, the fields

 

in your absence

between brightness and weight

I broke a sheaf of light

 

Pamela Olson, 4/19/08

 

This found poetry was written for prompt #13 at Poefusion.

 

Each line is the title of a poem

by the following poets (in order of

appearance):  Mary Oliver, Li-Young Lee,

William Stafford, Jill Osier, Robert Frost,

Robert Frost, Natasha Threthewey, Judith Harris,

Kevin Goodan, and A.R. Ammons

10 Comments so far

  1. Michelle Johnson April 19th, 2008 6:38 am

    Beautiful. I must try this one day. You placed each title so tenderly to make your story come alive. I loved this. Thanks for sharing it with us. Have a nice weekend.

  2. cynthia April 19th, 2008 9:05 am

    wow pam this poem whisper of want proves you to be a master architect! sooo pretty and delicate, the poem is only done
    justice when whispered.

  3. Earl E. Mohr April 19th, 2008 9:25 am

    So, Pam——–how are you?
    I have been following both Coosa Creek sites. Yes, I know there are many more, but, in this case you must know of which two I refer. At the end of the month I will be printing up my “Pam Olson File” to share with ‘Salon Nouveau’. The GBB ‘Literary Open Mic-Night is getting a longer than expected hiatus. Anyway, on to the point.
    Thank you for creating something seriously good out of this “titled” approach to making thoughts come together from dissimilar tongues to nurture your own over-all concept. The genius here? That you didn’t apply it for the same effect the the Gold Beach moderator would spring on his captive audience. The humor in his “Index” versifyin’ wasn’t lost, of course, just the dignity. Your version happens in three elements; impression, invitation, and introduction to one another. Kind of like having guests in for dinner. Kudos!
    Earl E. Mohr

  4. J.C. Montgomery April 19th, 2008 12:28 pm

    Yes, cynthia has it spot on…you are a true architect and a beautiful wordsmith.

    Wow. This is spectacular!!

  5. Pam April 19th, 2008 8:00 pm

    Earl, I’m so glad that you decided to leave a comment– finally. Thank you for the kind words. You haven’t sent me any of your poems lately– have you been writing?

  6. Noah April 19th, 2008 8:49 pm

    Oh, I really like how you constructed this.

  7. Vixen April 19th, 2008 8:50 pm

    I am just starting to write poetry (last in 8th grade which was in the mid 70s) and I am not very well read poetry wise, so I am not ready to tackle anything like this. I have read a few of the others also. But yours is terrific. Well done.

    Thanks for visiting and especially for commenting!

  8. Earl E. Mohr April 20th, 2008 12:23 am

    Lady Pam,
    I am. The howsomever of public reading has finally taken a rest stop, which had begun to take place about the time you were preparing some of your finest Gold Beach presentations. Public readings of other works was a performance among those of the other participants. In my conversations with Rick, which while tendered with humor, always bore the spark of truths to be studied and practiced, the idea of a moderator performing his own material comes across as self-promotion. GBB hasn’t even entered into discussions about returning the old format to the ‘Rare Book Room”. Carolyn and I are attempting to foster another Salon on a once a month basis, ala Brookings.
    I will post you a copy of the demo CD of “The Voices of …” Those who have aided in brining about this fine item have faith in The Reading Wizard of Od’, and I owe them a debt of gratitude.
    With your permission only, I can e-post random pieces. I should probably send them to your home.
    This is worthy of the time you invest in it;
    Earl E. Mohr

  9. Milou April 20th, 2008 3:25 pm

    Hi Pam,
    I really like the idea of taking a line of other poems and putting them together in one. And also it all fits together perfectly! Really like it,
    Milou
    PS:
    LOVE the picture!

  10. cynthia April 27th, 2008 2:52 pm

    wonderfully written, a delicate being this one.

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