Apr 28
Via Negativa - Alone
it was not silence
for the mourning dove called
and the trees whispered within their leaves
telling of the changes to come
it was not loneliness
for we held hands as
you and I walked in the field
toward a still pond
it was not want
for what more could I have
beside home, family, friends,
food, and meaningful work
and yet the silence between us
apparent and real
the loneliness and want
cry out with each footstep
how can we be something
for each other when
we are not that for ourselves
Pamela Olson, 4/28/08
This poem was written in response to a prompt at Poefusion.
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dang girl… nice job… that was smooth as silk,, and so easily slid into … loved it!!!!
Pam, this is great but, sad. How is it that couples can start out so vibrant and end up so lonely? Communication is always strongest in the beginning when you meet but, somewhere along the line you lose that closeness. You’ve done a wonderful job conveying the irregularities in a relationship. Have a nice day.
That was very well written and so moving. Really, it made me just sadly sigh because it is so true.
Sometimes the truth can bring sadness…but it can bring strength too, especially if it initiates change…this is beautiful
Oh, this is wonderful!
But, that’s why we need others; without the need, we’d all be alone all the time.
This was absolutely wonderful! Beautifully descriptive and very thought provoking too. I felt a twinge of sadness and loss as I read this work.
all i can do is echo all the others. beautiful, sad, true, but not fatally so, and not ultimately so. a passing kind of true if we are lucky