Amputated Moon

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Apr 30

Gifts For the End of Day

Category: My Poetry

Bring me the sunset in a cup,

            claret-clear and constant;

and pull down the whispered-white clouds,

            wrap them on my shoulders.

 

Round the stars sprinkled in the dusk,

            baubles within your hand;

lay them around my narrow wrist,

            a bracelet filled with light.

 

These gifts will be your best response

            to my unsaid desires,

which lie sharp-edged between us two

            in the gathering night.

 

Pamela Olson, 4/30/08                      

 

Emily Dickinson’s line, “Bring me the sunset in a cup”

is the prompt at Poefusion.

20 comments

20 Comments so far

  1. Michelle Johnson April 30th, 2008 6:07 am

    Oh Pam, this is beautiful. I love it. Your words are so precise and your layout of this poem is perfect. Your story touches my heart. Have a nice day. This poem is my favorite.

  2. Carole (watermaid) April 30th, 2008 10:24 am

    This transports me to somewhere out there and lifts my spirits. Lovely!

  3. Rae Trigg April 30th, 2008 3:14 pm

    This is a wonderful poem. I love the images of someone drinking the sunset while wearing the clouds as a shawl and the stars as a bracelet. Beautiful.

  4. lissa April 30th, 2008 6:38 pm

    the last stanza’s my favorite, a beautiful moment in time

  5. Noah April 30th, 2008 8:12 pm

    This is beautiful, and I love the alliteration going on.

  6. paisley May 1st, 2008 8:55 am

    oh i am in love with the visual on that second stanza!!!!!

  7. SandyCarlson May 2nd, 2008 11:56 am

    Hello,
    Your prompt of desert or deserted will be up Sunday at One Single Impression. Will you be able to provide a poem for the post? We’d need it tomorrow, if at all possible.

    Thanks.

  8. Cassandra May 2nd, 2008 12:51 pm

    Lovely indeed! The stars as baubles is so imaginative.

  9. One More Believer May 2nd, 2008 1:26 pm

    takes me to a beautiful place…

  10. cynthia May 3rd, 2008 1:08 pm

    I love this one, very innocent and pretty.

  11. AnthonyNorth October 27th, 2008 9:50 am

    A poem to make you feel good. Enjoyed this.

  12. Geraldine October 27th, 2008 10:47 am

    Absolutely gorgeous! Well done Pam. I truly enjoyed reading (and re-reading) this beautiful work.

    Great use of the prompt too.

  13. Tumblewords October 27th, 2008 11:27 am

    Incredibly beautiful imagery – lovely gifts, indeed!

  14. Sandy October 27th, 2008 1:14 pm

    I can see this poem. Beautiful!

  15. Deborah Godin October 27th, 2008 4:54 pm

    This is so vivid! I always look forward to your poems, and enjoy them!

  16. zoya gautam October 27th, 2008 6:11 pm

    ..gently beautiful..many thanks..

  17. SandyCarlson October 27th, 2008 7:27 pm

    Oh, that damned sword. The imagery here evokes Yeats’s “He Wishes for the Cloths of Heaven.” Such gifts can help close the distance between two–to a double-edged point!

  18. Barb's Haiku October 28th, 2008 3:15 pm

    Exquisite! I feel as though I have just been transported into every romantic fantasy I have ever had and never dared to have!

  19. patois October 29th, 2008 9:32 pm

    Oh, I can see why you would “re-gift” this poem for the OSI prompt this week. It merits continual display.

  20. one more believer October 30th, 2008 8:15 pm

    that i should know a bracelet as the one you possess… such a perfect gift…

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