Amputated Moon

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May 4

Revealed

Category: Tanka and Haiku

walk through the desert

drink in the hot arid air

exposed to the wind

strip me bare of all façade

truth shines like a grain of sand

 

 

Pamela Olson, 5/4/08

 

 

This tanka was written for the prompt,

desert at One Single Impression

 

Photo courtesy of Tom Claytor

www.claytor.com

21 Comments so far

  1. Noah May 4th, 2008 7:11 am

    Great!

  2. WillThink4Wine May 4th, 2008 7:21 am

    Sandblasted down to truth? I’m not sure most humans could deal with that much truth.

  3. Scott May 4th, 2008 7:49 am

    Interesting twist. My initial thoughts of “desert” are waste and emptiness, yet you have turned that on its head and found it to removal of masks and finding of reality.

  4. cynthia May 4th, 2008 10:08 am

    Excellent!

  5. Raven May 4th, 2008 11:38 am

    “Truth shines like a grain of sand.” Lovely line, lovely poem.

  6. MyBellavia May 4th, 2008 11:42 am

    Very concise and to the point. I also like “truth shines like a grain of sand”.

  7. Andrée May 4th, 2008 2:03 pm

    I like your poem a lot. I’ve always thought of coldness as baring truth, so this is something for me to chew on.

  8. maryt/theteach May 4th, 2008 4:06 pm

    Pam, Lovely tanka to express “desert.” Have a happy weekend! :D

  9. zoya gautam May 4th, 2008 5:21 pm

    ..phrasing of words at times sounds like pop -glossy,smooth-and at others like _Rock-Real,no hanky panky..this sounds like Rock(to me ie)..Thank U..

  10. Angelica May 4th, 2008 6:57 pm

    wow. you have an interesting way with words.

  11. gautami tripathy May 5th, 2008 10:56 am

    Excellent photo. And for verse..wonderful!

    pinpricks

  12. TeriC May 5th, 2008 1:42 pm

    I love those words, ‘truth shines’.

  13. Sandy May 5th, 2008 2:33 pm

    Your tanka captured that photo beautifully. I like it.

  14. One More Believer May 5th, 2008 5:47 pm

    …beautiful tanka… always felt the wind was a positive movement… and the desert… well, there is no other place like it…

  15. qualcosa di bello May 6th, 2008 9:57 am

    deserted by distractions…erosion to the truth. beautiful words!

  16. Quietpaths May 6th, 2008 1:21 pm

    These are both moving; there is nothing so stark in truth as a grain of sand, it’s true!

  17. Painted Bunting Books May 6th, 2008 5:08 pm

    Hi Pam,
    “Revealed” really captures my experience of the desert. I’ve always found it to be a place that brings me to truth. I’ve been freewrite journaling prose the last 3 months but your blog really inspires me to experiment with poetry.

    I also really enjoyed the imagery in “Gifts For the End of Day,” “Star Map” and “Back Home”.

    Hope to see you guys soon!

  18. Gemma May 7th, 2008 3:23 am

    Nothing like the bare bones of truth. Quite confronting!

    Gemma

  19. Annie May 7th, 2008 11:30 am

    Unvarnished reality The desert does that.

  20. spacedlaw May 8th, 2008 4:21 am

    Nothing like a desert trek to discover one’s true self.

  21. missmays May 10th, 2008 5:52 pm

    really nice flow of words and movement

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