Amputated Moon

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May 11

Once Alive

Category: Tanka and Haiku

 

moth lost in a flame

broken wings scattered about

one lies within wax

the other shimmers in light

reminders of once warm life

 

Pamela Olson, 5/11/08

 

 

This was written for the prompt

“warm” at One Single Impression

17 Comments so far

  1. SandyCarlson May 11th, 2008 5:18 pm

    What happens sometimes when we get too close to the fire. Thanks for this poem, Pam. I can see it and feel it.

  2. Nancy May 11th, 2008 7:52 pm

    Beautiful poem and photo. Thank you for sharing them.

  3. Raven May 11th, 2008 8:28 pm

    Sad but beautiful. Love the photo too.

  4. maryt/theteach May 12th, 2008 7:13 am

    Lovely response to “warm” this week, Pam! Thank you! :)

  5. WillThink4Wine May 12th, 2008 1:44 pm

    Another life flickers out, so sad. Beautiful Tanka for the prompt this week.

  6. Quietpaths May 12th, 2008 4:51 pm

    I really admire all the layers in this tanka. It is sad but very lovely.

  7. Noah May 12th, 2008 7:04 pm

    Really great!

  8. MyBellavia May 13th, 2008 6:40 am

    Beautiful poem.

  9. gautami tripathy May 13th, 2008 10:40 am

    GReat imagery!

    warm feelings

  10. texasblu May 13th, 2008 3:11 pm

    Yes,

    The flame draws the moth, but deadly if gotten too close. I like the symbolism you allow the reader to have on their own - they can take it literal or abstract. Fabulous.

  11. cynthia May 13th, 2008 7:37 pm

    oh, delicate and lovely.

  12. Sandy May 14th, 2008 4:18 am

    Wise poem! I like it very much.

  13. One More Believer May 14th, 2008 4:09 pm

    …the vision of broken wings is disheartening tho the tanka itself is beautiful and the photo!

  14. Geraldine May 14th, 2008 6:29 pm

    This was beautifully written. The photo is amazing! G

  15. missmays May 15th, 2008 11:28 am

    Beautiful picture, and interesting and poetically pleasing twist on the concept of warmth. Thanks

  16. spacedlaw May 16th, 2008 5:51 am

    Tragic but beautiful

  17. Deb Vatcher May 16th, 2008 6:52 am

    This is wonderful. Love the poem, and the photograph.

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