Amputated Moon

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Jun 3

Birth Song

Category: My Poetry

Release me, O Sea

salt-water womb

from your dark chaos

 

birth me

on the rising tide

yearning for the moon

 

 

on the rock

there is safety

I long for dry land

 

 

keep my breath close

from your bound molecules

from your unbearable density

 

 

release me, O Sea

born me and toss me

to the safety of the land

 

Pamela Olson, 6/3/08

 

 

This was poem was inspired

by the painting by Rick Mobbs

at Mine Enemy Grows Older

7 comments

7 Comments so far

  1. Arkay June 3rd, 2008 3:49 pm

    That is very beautiful. I love being immediately drawn in by your use of the first person; I actually felt myself alone upon the waves.

  2. Ralph Murre June 3rd, 2008 3:55 pm

    Pam, I like this poem — a lot — but don’t understand your use of “born”. I thought the word was strictly past-tense. No matter, like all your work, this is very good.

  3. Pam June 3rd, 2008 4:50 pm

    Ralph– I confess that my use of the ‘born’ was one of poetic license. I just like the sound of the word in the line; birthed just didn’t make it.

  4. Noah June 3rd, 2008 8:38 pm

    This is absolutely wonderful.

  5. rick June 4th, 2008 9:27 am

    I like it too. What about bear me, for born me? Just a thought. You have the poetic license (I still have to look twice to spell license). Drive on!

  6. Pam June 4th, 2008 5:49 pm

    OK I have ruminated and received feedback and decided to change ‘born’ to ‘birth’. I think it is confusing and I have repeated the poem aloud several times both ways and think I am happy with ‘birth’.

    My license does allow for “U” turns.

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