Comments on: Birth Song http://coosacreek.org/amputated/2008/06/03/birth-song/ poetry, nature, writing (all writing is the property of the writer and should be considerd copywritten) Mon, 08 Mar 2010 06:19:37 -0700 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.5 hourly 1 By: new arrivals, new arrangements « the storybook collaborative http://coosacreek.org/amputated/2008/06/03/birth-song/comment-page-1/#comment-799 new arrivals, new arrangements « the storybook collaborative Tue, 17 Jun 2008 13:42:16 +0000 http://coosacreek.org/amputated/?p=220#comment-799 [...] Pam, author of coosacreek/amputated moon, wrote Birth Song [...] [...] Pam, author of coosacreek/amputated moon, wrote Birth Song [...]

]]> By: Pam http://coosacreek.org/amputated/2008/06/03/birth-song/comment-page-1/#comment-746 Pam Wed, 04 Jun 2008 23:49:43 +0000 http://coosacreek.org/amputated/?p=220#comment-746 OK I have ruminated and received feedback and decided to change 'born' to 'birth'. I think it is confusing and I have repeated the poem aloud several times both ways and think I am happy with 'birth'. My license does allow for "U" turns. OK I have ruminated and received feedback and decided to change ‘born’ to ‘birth’. I think it is confusing and I have repeated the poem aloud several times both ways and think I am happy with ‘birth’.

My license does allow for “U” turns.

]]> By: rick http://coosacreek.org/amputated/2008/06/03/birth-song/comment-page-1/#comment-745 rick Wed, 04 Jun 2008 15:27:48 +0000 http://coosacreek.org/amputated/?p=220#comment-745 I like it too. What about bear me, for born me? Just a thought. You have the poetic license (I still have to look twice to spell license). Drive on! I like it too. What about bear me, for born me? Just a thought. You have the poetic license (I still have to look twice to spell license). Drive on!

]]> By: Noah http://coosacreek.org/amputated/2008/06/03/birth-song/comment-page-1/#comment-744 Noah Wed, 04 Jun 2008 02:38:35 +0000 http://coosacreek.org/amputated/?p=220#comment-744 This is absolutely wonderful. This is absolutely wonderful.

]]> By: Pam http://coosacreek.org/amputated/2008/06/03/birth-song/comment-page-1/#comment-742 Pam Tue, 03 Jun 2008 22:50:44 +0000 http://coosacreek.org/amputated/?p=220#comment-742 Ralph-- I confess that my use of the 'born' was one of poetic license. I just like the sound of the word in the line; birthed just didn't make it. Ralph– I confess that my use of the ‘born’ was one of poetic license. I just like the sound of the word in the line; birthed just didn’t make it.

]]> By: Ralph Murre http://coosacreek.org/amputated/2008/06/03/birth-song/comment-page-1/#comment-741 Ralph Murre Tue, 03 Jun 2008 21:55:05 +0000 http://coosacreek.org/amputated/?p=220#comment-741 Pam, I like this poem -- a lot -- but don't understand your use of "born". I thought the word was strictly past-tense. No matter, like all your work, this is very good. Pam, I like this poem — a lot — but don’t understand your use of “born”. I thought the word was strictly past-tense. No matter, like all your work, this is very good.

]]> By: Arkay http://coosacreek.org/amputated/2008/06/03/birth-song/comment-page-1/#comment-740 Arkay Tue, 03 Jun 2008 21:49:45 +0000 http://coosacreek.org/amputated/?p=220#comment-740 That is very beautiful. I love being immediately drawn in by your use of the first person; I actually felt myself alone upon the waves. That is very beautiful. I love being immediately drawn in by your use of the first person; I actually felt myself alone upon the waves.

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