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Jun 29

Dawn’s Door

Category: Tanka and Haiku

 

the doorway beckons

dawn pauses

as I walk through

crickets call for day

as shadows retreat

slumbering summer

awakes

 

Pamela Olson, 6/29/08

 

 

This tanka was written

for the prompt “doorways”

at One Single Impression

16 Comments so far

  1. WillThink4Wine June 29th, 2008 6:18 am

    I love ’slumbering summer awakes’. How long we seem to wait for this event! Thanks for this, Pam!

  2. me Ann my camera June 29th, 2008 6:38 am

    “slumbering summer awakes” is such a wonderful mention by way of introduction to the day at this time of year, for indeed, a walk through butterfly meadows surrounds us with a multitude of sounds and miniature worlds of other creatures. Lovely.

  3. SandyCarlson June 29th, 2008 11:30 am

    Slumbering summer….It is the season that marks time with its lazy eyes only half open. Beautiful, Pam.

  4. Patricia (a/k/a Roswila) June 29th, 2008 3:02 pm

    Those first four lines are truly intriguing.

  5. Rachel June 29th, 2008 3:22 pm

    “..as I walk through
    crickets call for day..”
    I like how you create a picture by describing the sounds around you. Great job!!! x)

  6. Gemma June 29th, 2008 3:31 pm

    “Doorway beckons” - gives the doorway a living/breathing perspective! At times, it may seem that way!

  7. Edward S. Gault June 29th, 2008 7:57 pm

    I live in Boston now, and haven’t heard those crickets “call for day” in a long,long time. It brought back memories of the small towns in the midwest where I would visit my grandparents.
    I took it for granted back then because I wanted to live in the “Big City”-Well, here I am and now I miss it!
    Thank you for the memories, and a great poem.

  8. Cynthia June 30th, 2008 1:31 pm

    Rich visuals, love “dawn pauses” I want to be there.

  9. Sandy June 30th, 2008 1:52 pm

    And I hope passing through this door was good for you! Exciting poem-I love stepping into the unknown.

  10. Kathiespoettree June 30th, 2008 5:53 pm

    Lovely photo that beckens to the waiting day. Your poem says it well. And thanks for this week’s prompt and photo.

  11. TeriC July 1st, 2008 7:28 am

    These words are just so lovely and evocative.

  12. lissa July 1st, 2008 8:12 am

    very nice, you pick just the right words to describe summer

  13. Celine July 2nd, 2008 11:08 am

    A lovely tanka, and a fabulous picture to go with it. I like this week’s prompt. Thank you.

  14. One More Believer July 2nd, 2008 3:03 pm

    doorway beckons you have captured so well…

  15. Raven July 3rd, 2008 11:21 am

    Lovely… I love the “crickets call for day” line and “slumbering summer awakes”….

  16. Noah July 6th, 2008 11:25 am

    I just hope it doesn’t get too hot.

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