Amputated Moon

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Sep 17

Night’s Invitation

Category: My Poetry

Starscraper by Rick Mobbs

night has set sail

in her dark waters

her joy is the moon

her tears are the stars

she speaks in your dreams

               

wake now

come to my shore

my boat is empty

there is no balance

I wait for you at the dock

 

Pamela Olson, 9/17/08

 

In response to Starscraper

by Rick Mobbs

at Mine Enemy Grows Older

 

9 comments

9 Comments so far

  1. Rick September 17th, 2008 10:20 am

    night has set sail
    in her dark waters

    lovely imagery and rhythm

  2. Christine September 18th, 2008 4:41 pm

    This is haunting, beautiful, and speaks to me. Thank you

  3. Ralph Murre September 19th, 2008 1:58 pm

    nicely done!

  4. Marty E. September 20th, 2008 6:17 pm

    nice post for scribblings.

  5. AnthonyNorth September 21st, 2008 2:45 am

    I like the way you portray this as a journey.
    Imaginative.

  6. patois September 21st, 2008 8:41 am

    That’s just perfect. What images you conjure up.

  7. cynthia September 21st, 2008 10:50 am

    Love the idea of someone waiting for me to come into their
    warm safety, written gently as waves.

  8. Sweet Talking Guy.. September 21st, 2008 12:03 pm

    Cool invitation!

    Rick Mobbs’ pictures are a real inspiration.

  9. Tumblewords September 21st, 2008 9:33 pm

    this one is very nice – visual and vivid – nice take on the prompt and the painting!

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