Amputated Moon

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May 3

The Mere Idea of Lying Down

Category: My Poetry

            - after a line by Jose’ Saramago in Blindness

 

empty-bed21 

the waking dream

brings the feel of silken sheets

brushing along bare arms

bare legs

a caressed remembrance

 

dim light of a shaded lamp

lit long into the deep darkness

throws soft shadows of curtains

moving in and out

breathing with the night breeze

 

mere difference between lamp

shadow and night

just a change in temperature

as fingers move from warm light

to cool darkness

 

a memory of sleep

lies on the skin

like a body searching in the bed

for the hollow prepared for it

by the mere idea of lying down

 

Pamela Olson, 5/3/09

 

For One Single Impression’s

prompt “Tactile”

15 comments

15 Comments so far

  1. SandyCarlson May 3rd, 2009 6:47 pm

    Those memories can be so vivid–if only they could bring the rest!

    Beautiful image of the curtains, Pam. This is really wonderful.

  2. Jim May 3rd, 2009 6:51 pm

    I remember sleep well. It used to be I could sleep for eight hours straight. Now I awak for my shoulder pain in three hours, my leg pain in two hours, to go to the bathroom in four hours, and for breakfast in seven hours.
    Oh yes, I do remember other things in the night, other than sleep. You did well.
    ..

  3. if May 3rd, 2009 7:12 pm

    such an intimate feeling !

  4. Benjamin May 3rd, 2009 11:50 pm

    pardon me, but I’m one of those who feels that sleeping might be a waste of time – but this poem makes the mere act of wanting to go to sleep so inviting and intimate!

    =)

  5. Anthony North May 4th, 2009 2:49 am

    Those memories on the edge can be so powerful – like your words.

  6. Barb - WillThink4Wine May 4th, 2009 6:12 am

    One of my most favorite things is the feeling I get when I get into a bed with fresh sheets. Intimate and indulgent!

  7. Ofira Sephiroth May 4th, 2009 7:48 am

    Having insomnia, I never really get to enjoy sleep that much…not even with the knock-out medication I take. Thanks for giving me a more inviting look at what a lot of people take for granted.

  8. Quietpaths May 4th, 2009 9:33 am

    This seems to speak more about the beautiful waking dream, intimacy and absence than it does about sleep or the lack thereof. My reading anyhow. Beautiful images.

  9. Geraldine May 4th, 2009 11:28 am

    I loved your interpretation of this prompt. Like a sensuous dream, reading each line. Lovely!

  10. Tumblewords May 4th, 2009 11:37 am

    The senses shift according to need and ability – I enjoyed the way you worded the premise from ‘Blindness’.

  11. sue May 4th, 2009 5:17 pm

    I particularly like the fine distinction between “lamp/shadow and night” — qualitatively if not quantitatively different!

  12. zoya gautam May 4th, 2009 6:01 pm

    beautiful

  13. Michelle Johnson May 5th, 2009 10:53 am

    Hello Pam~ I was creating drop down menus at my blog to clear some space when I was taken by your beautiful poem. Hope all is well with you. Have a nice day.

  14. Amias May 6th, 2009 7:41 pm

    Oh I would love some of this — I have insomnia so bad it’s embarrassing to talk about. I truly enjoyed this.

  15. jorc May 8th, 2009 2:27 pm

    i love this. It reminds me so much of that special place between wakefullness and sleep that on rare occasion you find yourself feeling this luxuious!
    Great write!

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