Amputated Moon

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May 10

The Feel of the Journey

Category: My Poetry

barefoot-walking

how does wandering feel to the foot

dusty and aching

restless or staid

unbalanced

pleasure

            or pain

 

a small stone

rounded by years away

from its birth place

causes the foot to glide

foward

            a little

 

along the margins

of the pathway lie

green blades crushed

from a previous passing

of

            a pilgrim

 

brush along the grass

and the sweet scent

of chlorophyll rises

staining green

the

            bare sole

 

the foot flexes

its architectural arch

rising like a bow

before

it springs

            forward

 

turn and look

there in the pathway

is the evidence

fossilized and fixed

the journey

            written

 

see what the wandering

has left behind

in the soft dust

and the green grass

the imprint

            of a foot

 

Pamela Olson, 5/10/09

 

For One Single Impression’s prompt,

“What’s It Like?”

13 comments

13 Comments so far

  1. Anthony North May 10th, 2009 12:44 pm

    The effort in this is marvellous.

  2. SandyCarlson May 10th, 2009 12:49 pm

    All our living goes into each step. I love this, Pam.

  3. Amias May 10th, 2009 1:03 pm

    This is amazing .. each foot step tell a tale, and each tale wears down the path of where the foot goes/went … leaves a memory upon the earth, our lives, that none can erase. Yes, you put a lot of effort into this one, and it shows.

  4. Deborah Godin May 10th, 2009 1:05 pm

    A beautiful, almost stop-motion rendering of the topography and physiology of a journey. Wonderful to read!

  5. Jim May 10th, 2009 7:50 pm

    Hi Pam, this is good. You must walk barefooted. Then you often think of each step, how it is different and the hidden poetic meanings hidden there for you to reveal.
    It was one of those smoothed sitting on a step in Ireland that broke my kneecap when I fell. That hurt a lot. :-)
    ..

  6. floreta May 10th, 2009 9:01 pm

    i love the meaning of this. there is a story to tell in the journey. one step at a time.

  7. Tumblewords May 11th, 2009 6:46 pm

    Step after step. This is what it’s like – Lovely!

  8. gabrielle May 11th, 2009 11:59 pm

    The imprint of a step. What it replaces and what it carries along. I’ve been too busy to notice.

  9. Neverending story May 12th, 2009 9:56 am

    Yes, I enjoyed this, the way the rhythm leads one on along the walk. Spoke to many of my senses – touch, smell, sight. Thanks.

  10. Tammy May 12th, 2009 6:06 pm

    This was creative and I loved the form. Wonderful!

  11. irenet May 13th, 2009 8:15 pm

    You’ve made an imprint by the textures you’ve built into this.

  12. patti May 13th, 2009 8:45 pm

    What a beautiful poem! I never thought of that- so many things we take for granted!!! Excellent job…thanks~

  13. Beth May 13th, 2009 10:20 pm

    Pam–
    Boy, if you put this much awareness into every step…you’ll soon be at guru status!

    Thanks–

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